Whether or Not the Government in Zhuhai Should Relocate Fishermen in Xiangzhou
(A) Relocate Recently, a debate has arisen about whether or not the government in Zhuhai should relocate fishermen in Xiangzhou. Some people hold the opinion that the fishermen are able to stay in Xiangzhou pier, the government ought to take the responsibility for protecting fishermen’s rights. Some citizens, however, argue that Zhuhai government should relocate Xiangzhou fishermen because it will develop Zhuhai better. In fact, the government relocate fishermen have more benefits for the development of Zhuhai’s economic, urban cultural and citizens’ life. Some citizens said that moving the fishermen has deeply negative influences on their lives. However, Wang, G. (2010, August) Claims that it is an indisputable fact that infrastructure is important for the development of a city. If the government can spend more money on building a theater in a modern environment, it definitely will improve most citizens’ living standards. Keeping fishermen there will damage the image of the beautiful and clean opera house. It is also a good way to attract more tourists to come to Zhuhai. Some citizens argue that fishing has been the symbol of Zhuhai. Nevertheless, fine arts have become an integral part of urban culture. Orchestral music, dramas and operas can make a city’s modern culture more energetic. Musicals help to define a city and give the members of that city a strong sense of belonging. Lyons, A. (2010) claims that by appreciating different kinds of music, people learn to appreciate cultural differences and become more open- minded. The citizens of Zhuhai will have a sense of pride.
The final reason for why government should relocate fishermen in Xiangzhou is it is a good way to create jobs for fishermen. Fishermen make a living by catching fish near the Xiangzhou, the theater may influence the life of the fishermen. However, it is a good chance to create jobs. It creates employment opportunities through the construction and maintenance of theaters. The government will try their best to supply more jobs to the fishermen. They also will take responsibility for protecting fishermen’s rights. In conclusion, government in Zhuhai ought to relocate fishermen in Xiangzhou . it is benefits the majority citizens in Zhuhai, and it also benefits the development of urban culture of Zhuhai. And the most important reason is that it will promote the economy development of Zhuhai. If the Zhuhai government relocated Xiangzhou fishermen, it will create a more modern environment for the opera house and develop quickly into an international and city.Word count: 408ReferencesWang, G. (2012, August 28) The importance of infrastructure. South China Morning Post.Lyons, A. (2010, January 10). The influence of different culture. Marking CriteriaExcellent9-10Good7-8 marksSatisfactory5-6 marksUnsatisfactory1-4 marksContent: thesis statement, arguments, major ideas and supporting evidenceDemonstrates a very good understanding of the essay topic.Shows a very clear thesis statement, with clear arguments and refuted counterarguments.Presents explicitly relevant evidence to support the arguments.Demonstrates a good understanding of the essay topic.Shows a clear thesis statement, with arguments and counterarguments refuted to some extent.Presents relevant evidence to support the arguments.Demonstrates a reasonable understanding of the essay topic.Shows a thesis statement, with some arguments and un-refuted counterarguments.Presents some relevant evidence to support the arguments.Demonstrates a marginal understanding of the essay topic.The thesis statement is not clearly stated, or there is no thesis statement. There are some arguments, but no counterarguments.There is little evidence to support the arguments.Organization: text structure (introduction-body-conclusion), paragraph structure (topic sentence and relevant supporting sentences), text coherence and cohesion Shows a very clear text structure, and well-sequenced material (topic sentence – supporting evidence) within the paragraph. Shows extremely logical progression of ideas and very good use of cohesive devices.The text communicates fluently to the reader.Shows a clear text structure, and sequenced material (topic sentence – supporting evidence) within the paragraph. Shows very logical progression of ideas and good use of cohesive devices.The text communicates quite fluently to the reader.Shows a fairly clear text structure, and reasonable sequence of material (topic sentence – supporting evidence) within the paragraph. Shows logical progression of ideas and mostly appropriate use of cohesive devices.The text communicates to the reader although there is some strain.Shows an unclear organizational pattern, with introduction and/or conclusion missing or mixed up with other parts. Shows limited use of cohesive devices.The text causes great strain for the reader.Mechanics: grammar accuracy, sentence structure and vocabularyDemonstrates very good grammatical accuracy, with no grammar errors.Uses a very wide range of sentence structures.Uses a very wide range of vocabulary with precision.Demonstrates good grammatical accuracy though with a few errors.Uses a wide range of sentence structures.Uses a wide range of vocabulary with some precision. Demonstrates satisfactory grammatical accuracy, but with some errors.Uses a satisfactory range of sentences structures, with minor errors that do not impede communication of ideas.Uses a satisfactory range of vocabulary, with some vocabulary items not appropriate to the task.Demonstrates limited grammatical accuracy, with some serious grammar errors.Uses a limited range of structures, with frequent errors that impedes communication of ideas.Uses a limited range of vocabulary with significant errors. APATimes New Roman12pt Font SizeDouble-spacedParagraphs indentedIn-text referencesFamily Name,PublisherYear/Date“Quotation marks”ReferencesName, DateArticle/Book namePublisherAPA FormattingHeaderTopic TitleSpecific TitleWord count: ###1”, 2.54cm marginsAlign LeftIndents 0.5”, 1.27cm[pic 1][pic 2]