Critique Of “Fatalist Attraction”
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Critique of Jane Does Essay One
January 28, 2003
Critique of “Response to ÐFatalist Attraction”
I think you make clear that you agree with Virginia Postrels point in the essay “Fatalist Attraction” that so-called experts should not be allowed to make medical choices that affect ordinary people, based on the notion that it is wrong for humans to try to change the course of nature. I can tell that you have strong feelings about this topic when you talk about the example of your own family members. But I also like that you are willing to keep an open mind as we learn more about biotechnology and especially about human cloning.
In the first paragraph, I think you provide a good summary of the article and then you end the paragraph with your thesis sentence. It is easy for the reader to understand the main point that you want to make in this sentence. But I think that the first paragraph is a little long and complicated and maybe the reader could follow the summary more easily if you divided that first paragraph into two or three smaller paragraphs. That way your introduction and summary would be several paragraphs instead of just one paragraph but I think that is okay for this kind of essay.
I think that the second paragraph is the best paragraph in the essay because you use a personal example that shows what you mean when you write about ordinary people who benefit from the advancements of science. I have members of my own family who might benefit from advancements in biotechnology and I dont want anyone to take the opportunity for a longer or better life from them.
The third paragraph is a little harder to understand. I am not sure what you are talking about when you mention the “doctors in their morning coats.” What is